Poetry: Parenthesis
Echoes of her laughter
(they’re sounding in my heart)
Thinking she is with me
(I wake with a start)
Silence and without her
(I search inside the room)
Within my heart however
(just darkness and the gloom)
Embracing her was sweetness
(loving her was divine)
Together we can make it
(I am hers and she is mine)
I love this beautiful woman
(who keeps my soul in tune)
She is a very special girl
(we’ll be together soon)
hi Rob, since you said you were still not sleepy or sleeping could I ask a question? well its going to be more than a question!
Sure, fire away
why the brackets? is it like an amplifier or echo to the un-bracketed words?
what brackets? For where? Not sure what you mean
like i know brackets are like places to put additional information when writing – but why did you use them in your poem here? i wondered whether you were using them to amplify or echo your words, since they weren’t explaining your original content. AHHH! It’s hard living in my brain – if got too confusing its ok let’s move on. and drop the brackets!
Already responded. I can keep up with you lol
ok I will go slow – i tend to get over excited about poetry that speaks more than it says. LOL! is right!
I CAN keep up with you, not can’t lol. Do you have Google hangouts? I keep in touch with my friend from India that way
yes i do! would you need my gmail account to find me?
You sent me an email. Hold on I’m going to check
that was yahoo – gmail is gallyotgina@gmail.com
Whoops you sent it through contact me. I’ll give you mine it’s Keatsj1964@gmail.com
Gotta go and charge my phone, I will be back 9:45pm my time, bfn
The parenthesis in the poem parenthesis served two purposes: one it’s sort of an echo of the sentence before and it’s a poem within a poem! Or the parenthesis could be like a whispered reinforcement of the line previous
awesome! I caught that too – something like micro poetry? – the lines could stand alone too. This one was another gem – I cannot imagine anyone wanting to leave such a sweet haven.
Precisely
wow, wow, wow…here’s another, “Love it” for you 🙂
Heh heh, thanks!
This is so sweet. :3
Thank you!
Aww I love this! You made me smile Rob!
Lovely! And hopeful!
May all your dreams come true.
And yours as well Yaz!